Rave Radio: Offline (0/0)
Email: Password:
Page: 1Rating: Unrated [0]
Poem About Candykid Mentality
Good [+1]Toggle ReplyLink» PoiSoNeD_CaNdY replied on Tue Oct 14, 2003 @ 7:00pm
poisoned_candy
Coolness: 92370
yes, i actually wrote a poem about raves *hangs head in shame*

so read this and then tell me how much it sucks

As the late hour advances
a clan bounces into the night
wearing smiles of anticipation.
An empty, faceless space beckons
it is here they will unite.

The door opens, step inside
a carnival of colors, a burst of fire
tonight we will touch
the stars, we will rise
up, ever higher.

Hugs and drugs,
toys and poi.
The walls shake,
the roof lifts, an explosion
of chemical joy.

"Last song!" says the dj,
all highs and energy expended.
The music stops, faces drop,
all would be so blissful, if
this night had never ended.

And as the weary, red eyed
revellers shuffle out the door,
there remains nothing left, nothing
besides little zip lock bags, strewn
empty 'cross the floor.
Good [+1]Toggle ReplyLink» nothingnopenope replied on Tue Oct 14, 2003 @ 7:01pm
nothingnopenope
Coolness: 201905
fantastic
Good [+1]Toggle ReplyLink» PookStah replied on Tue Oct 14, 2003 @ 7:02pm
pookstah
Coolness: 106595
wow....

dan, i think u ahve way too much time on your hands
Good [+1]Toggle ReplyLink» PoiSoNeD_CaNdY replied on Tue Oct 14, 2003 @ 7:04pm
poisoned_candy
Coolness: 92370
^^ haha thats true.

but literally i spent half an hour writing this in a coffee shop. i wrote it on two knapkins with a pencil
Good [+1]Toggle ReplyLink» Nordic_Avenger replied on Tue Oct 14, 2003 @ 7:21pm
nordic_avenger
Coolness: 40845
It was good, but I felt it needed more meat.
Good [+1]Toggle ReplyLink» PoiSoNeD_CaNdY replied on Tue Oct 14, 2003 @ 8:58pm
poisoned_candy
Coolness: 92370
comment, people, comment!!!

goddamit
Good [+1]Toggle ReplyLink» wisp replied on Tue Oct 14, 2003 @ 9:00pm
wisp
Coolness: 98000
i dont think you wouldve posted it if it sucked.

anyways, nice flow.

needs more making fun of, though.
Good [+1]Toggle ReplyLink» nothingnopenope replied on Tue Oct 14, 2003 @ 9:10pm
nothingnopenope
Coolness: 201905
here is my poem

I call it

FORTEEN YEAR OLD RAVER GIRL.

I told my mommy
I was sleeping next store
but the real truth is
I'm dancing to hardcore.

She thinks I am talking
about boys and hands
but in reality
there are glowsticks in my hands.

Mommy might think
I am sleeping in bed
but what I'm realy doing
Is giving a DJ head.

Mommy thinks my bad mood
is a teenage angst attack
but the real story is
my serotonin's out of wack.
Good [+1]Toggle ReplyLink» Nordic_Avenger replied on Tue Oct 14, 2003 @ 9:13pm
nordic_avenger
Coolness: 40845
Now Scotty, that's a poem!
Good [+1]Toggle ReplyLink» wisp replied on Tue Oct 14, 2003 @ 9:15pm
wisp
Coolness: 98000
NICE
Good [+1]Toggle ReplyLink» PookStah replied on Tue Oct 14, 2003 @ 9:16pm
pookstah
Coolness: 106595
that poem is awesome!!!
Poem About Candykid Mentality
Page: 1
Post A Reply
You must be logged in to post a reply.